The Ridge

      The Ridge       

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The Ridge

Before you start writing

Think about how you would describe the setting both on the water and once Danny is on the ridge.

How are you going to create atmosphere in your writing?

What sort of language are you going to use to create tension and suspense.

Create  

WALT write a descriptive piece of writing through the eyes of Danny.

Success Criteria

We need to focus on these things

• Full stops, capital letters,
• Paragraphs
• We need to follow the sentence tools for our opening paragraphs.

To start with you will write a description of the first scene, now move to when Danny lands on the edge of the lake and then move onto the ridge. Use the show not tell technique to create thoughtful writing. You are writing through the eyes of Danny. Create suspense and tension as he rides the ridge.                              

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Go to this padlet The Ridge and start writing your ideas, words feelings adjectives similies and metaphors.

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My name is the world's best mountain biker well actually my name is Danny Mackail I am from Scotland.I am alone like a loner on a canoe with my bright purple bike on the light shiney blue as the sky water.I finally got the the Isle of Skye I look to see what my challenge.Then I take my bike and start to bike up the rocky mountain.Now I am and going to start my challenge.

I am going around tight curves and steep edges.For once I think I am taking a risk.I am taking a jump to a jump and  then I take more risks.I hop onto a big boulder very carefully.wow I nearly fell into the water.Very carefully I balance on a very thin but heavy branch.I see this beautiful running waterfall as I bike passed.By a really green moose patch with lots of rough boulders

Now I start to bike on a patch of really sloppy mud.I try to work my way up the rocky mountain.Wow now I am on a huge rock shaped as a dinosaurs head by a extremely large swamp.I do some  mega tricks.So now I am carrying my bike up to the edge of the very ginormous hill.My feet are stomping on the rocks crunch,crunch,crunch the rock break crack,crack,crack,.I am finally at the top of the edge of the hill that was a big effort.I stand there with pride the wind blows on my face as I stand there I can smell seawater.

Suddenly I make my way down the rocky mountain.I do twists and turns flips and do some tricks.I make my way and I am at the a big patch of very green fresh grass it smells so refreshing.Wait I am going to do a trick on this rusty fence look.I suddenly flip and land it wow.I get to the this soft thin sand as yellow as sun.I have a lie down and rest for a bit and it is so restful.I wait about 5 minutes and then I be on my way home.