Friday, September 22, 2017

The Piano

       The Piano       
Make a copy, rename and start your writing on your copy.

Click on the url below and watch the short clip.

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Before you start writing
This video is about a man  who remembers his past and recalls his memories. Think about how he would be feeling and other memories that this might trigger.

WALT write a descriptive piece of writing from the old man’s point of view as he recalls his memories.

Success Criteria
We need to focus on these things
  • Full stops, capital letters,
  • Paragraphs
  • We need to follow the sentence tools for our opening paragraphs.
Once this is completed you can publish it on your personal blog.

This evening I was playing the piano and I was memorizing what has happened through the years my wife,the war and also my childhood.

I am going to begin off with my lovely caring wife and all the memories we had together.I remember the time when we went on our honeymoon we went to rarotonga  we went scuba diving  and also  I Iiked the luxury massages, and went swimming .Those time were the funnest times .But sadly she passed away of a heart attack last year. That was a terrifying thing to see and to hear from the hospital.But I need to move on with my life even though I am going to pass away soon.Luckily I know that she is always going to be apart of my life.

Now I am thinking of when I was in the war with my little brother and we wore dark green pants with a dark green top with a first aid cross.But my brother tragically ran in front of a loaded gun and got shot I held his dead body in my arms as I hear him say to me
“Thank you so much and thank you for helping me in my life” I said
“Don't die now there is so much more to do in you life”.
But it was to late he died in my heartbroken arms.But I will always remember the wonderful times we had together when we were young kids.They were fun times we went to the the park and even went to the dairy together I remember the lollies there were only 5 cents.

The only thing I liked that I memorized was when I  was only little. For my birthday I got a ride on horse with a wheel at the back it was cool.I picked it up with pride and I started to ride it. I galloped everywhere and I even rid it under the furniture  . Every morning I was so excited to go on it because that was the only fun toy I had.Days past quickly when I was little so I only got to go on my toy for only a little bit every day.I traveled everywhere with my toy wherever we went I would take my ride on horse.My parents could tell that I really liked it.But it was time to let it go I give it to someone younger than me that actually needed it.

Te Ngahere

Wal are learning about Te ngahere,the rakau, the kararehe,the manu and the risks to the forest.

Thursday, August 24, 2017



World Events for your writing
I’m sure you won’t have missed the events in Barcelona, Spain this week or the devastation caused by the mud slide in Sierre Leone and the violence in Charlottesville, Virginia. The prompt this week uses the emotions that the media has shown us.

Latest prompt
As I said at the top of this page, the events around the world this week:

… as it came rushing towards us we…

My day is a disgrace, my life will be over.  I hear that there is a crazy, insane man driving around. I think to myself is he a wild animal? He is killing people, I am as scared as if I was getting kidnapped. He looks petrifying, I can't stand looking at him. His car skids on black oil. I’m panicking, my heart is pounding 100 mile per hour.

As his white colourless van bolted towards us we slammed our bodies against the orange brick wall.I hope he is sorry for doing this,I despise him.I fell downcast.

Friday, August 18, 2017

Pangarau Fractions

100 word challenge #44

Week 4:

This is the new 100 word challenge #44

Just what is the story behind this character’s laughter?

The form will close on 19th August at 23.45 BST   

The sea is a swirly storm. My laughter is unexpectedly contagious. My heart is thunder. The moss is like gold.The seal's nose is brown bark ,the pieces of seaweed are carrots. My whiskers are wire, my teeth are rocks. My nails are sharp knifes, my feet are 1 meter rulers. My stomach is an elephant, my fingers are sausages.The rocks are grey tiles, the leaves are carvings. The rocks are a crunchy bar my tongue is a red skin. The spots on my face are strawberries, the seaweed is a snail.My mouth is moving “Chop, chop, chop”.

Monday, August 14, 2017

The Magician TT

Week 3 extension activity: The Magician
WALT: To include relative clauses in my writing.
Key task:
Write 5 (or more) sentences containing a “relative clause”?
E.g. The magician, who had incredible powers, strode confidently across the marble floor.
  1. It splits the main clause.
  2. The clause begins with ‘who’, ‘which’ or ‘with’.
  3. It must supply an extra bit of information to the sentence.
  4. Commas should surround the clause.

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Think about these questions:
  • What mood do you think the magician is in?
  • Do you think he is a good or evil character?
  • If you could have magical powers, what would you choose to be able to do?
  • What do the words at the top of the picture say?
  • Who lives inside the house?

Success criteria:
I will know I am successful when I have:
  • Included a relative clause in my writing
  • Used who, which or with in my writing
  • Used commas to separate my clause

I am a magician, who had incredible powers, strode confidently across the marble floor.I am feeling like I am indestructible i’m feeling proud as proud as I can be.I think I am magnificent I am as nice as anyone can imagination.I wish I was transparent or camouflage but I dream to be as light as a feather.A boof of smoke came up and it spelt a word Minimint.I wonder why it said that doggy.Well were are my brother and sister they yell out to me
“Scotty come inside now mum wants you?” I said

“I'm coming now” It is time for dinner so I have to stop tell my story or it go on forever and ever so “BYE”

Thursday, August 10, 2017

Whale Fantasia/Wiki 3

          Week 3   Whale Fantasia
This afternoon I am going to jump off a boat to go swimming with the humpback whales.I am as excited as if I was going to disneyland for a holiday.I put on my gear and jump “wow”.The water is as clear as glass and the sun is as bright as a flame.I go deeper and deeper down  into the water, it gets blacker and blacker and  it is as black as diesel.I see some very tiny fish they are as tiny as a kernel. Suddenly I pop up into a cave “WOW” It is as sparkly as a sapphire it stuns my eyes.This is paradise.Now we are getting up to the enormouse large humpback whales. Their barnacles on the soft fleshy back are as rough as concrete.Their tails are as extremely big they are as big as a building.Their tummies are as wrinkly as a old grandpas skin.Their mouths are enormously My legs are sore  like I have just ran a 90 mile  marathon. Suddenly it was time to pop up.Nooo I said in my head I want to stay with the gigantic whales.But my dive tank was going to run out so had to come up.2 minutes later……………. I came up.I had so much fun swimming with the whales today.I hope I can do this again again.