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It's not a planet It's our home 
I'm in the dark space I'm dreaming in my mind I picture the world before I get back.I smell the dirty spaceship
well I dream .I hear the people talk in my dream.I feel happy in my dream .I taste the food that I eat in my home.
I wake up in space and I see the colourful star shining in the dark beautiful space .I smell the rusty spaceship.I hear the rocket moving down to earth .I feel still and stiff.Tasting the dusty spaceship only 52 hours and 20s ec nearly there ya.
I can see the bright sun I squint and then I see my home it is bright green and a beautiful dark blue sea .I say to myself i'm nearly there I can't wait to see my mum,dad,sister,brothers.
I'm shaking my body is moving so fast.Im going throw the atmosphere
I can see earth i'm nearly there.
WALT to use adjectives and punctuation.
Te mutunga mai o te pai -Ultimately awesome! Your story really impressed me with the descriptive language, I could almost smell the dirty spaceship for myself. Did you get Google Read Write to read out your story? I find this helps me hear where I need to use comma's and fullstops. Great effort keep up the great work! Koia kei a koe
ReplyDeleteKIA Ora Talia i really enjoyed looking at your story i think you put in a great effort and i enjoyed how you used great adjectives for some of your words.
ReplyDeleteKIA Ora Tahlia
ReplyDeleteI liked looking at your awesome story about IT NOT A PLANET, IT OUR HOME.
You put lots of adjectives in your story and great effort put in.
You can work on putting in more punctuation in your writing and story's.